DO YOU WANT TO GO ONE OF THEM?
I like to investigate the old houses and the old houses of Akşehir are very different from the other houses which I have seen so far.
It is not a big city but beatiful,small,old and loaded withlots of trees.There you can have lots of fresh air.The homes of Akşehir is also different.Of course there are lots of modern apartments but the real houses of Akşehir are in north.Although it is difficult to reach them since they are far from the city centre,lots of tourist go there.They are small,old houses.They were made from wooden.There are generally two floors in these houses.It is sth like that doublex.They are precisely stunning,old,wooden houses.
When you enter from the door the first flor will met you.It is not very big when you coompare it with the 2.floor.When you lok at the left side you will see an elegant,huge,old kitchen and in the kitchen there is a small,square hole from which you send the meals the other side.The other side is a room where you can eat tastaful meals.
The second flor is for sleeping and for guests.There are generally bedrooms in there.In each bedroom there is two beatiful,huge,old beds.They are generally made from wooden when you look the rooms of house you will precisely hear voices sth like that cıtırt cıtırt because of the material of house.It is very interesting and also stunning voice.
My friend I think the thesis statement is not clear,and "It is sth like that doublex" I culdn't understand this sentence.anyway, your essay is OK.:)
YanıtlaSilI'm agrree wıth yazgı.your thesıs statement is not clear.there are a lot of vocabulary and grammar mistakes.but instead of everythıng your essay is good :)
YanıtlaSilI like your essay but there are some grammatical mistakes. and i agree with yazgı and selda.I think your introduction is very short. You can improve your introduction.but instead of these, your essay is good and i like it.:))))
YanıtlaSilFerhat,
YanıtlaSilYour description of Akşehir is interesting but why don't you improve it by correcting some speling errors, using some more striking words and also addaing more descriptive details. See my marks in the text!!!
You wrote:
"DO YOU WANT TO GO ONE OF THEM?
I like to investigate the old houses ?????(rewrite the sentence) and the old houses of Akşehir are very different from the other houses which I have seen so far.
It is not a big city but beatiful,small,old and loaded with???lots of trees.There you can have lots of fresh air.The ???homes of Akşehir is (are) also different.Of course there are lots of modern apartments but the real houses of Akşehir are in ??? north.Although it is difficult to reach them since they are far from the city centre,lots of tourist go there.???(write a linking setence here) They are small,old houses.They were made from wooden.There are generally two floors (two storey high houses) in these houses.It is sth like that doublex???.They are precisely stunning,old,wooden houses.
When you enter ???from the door?? the first flor will met??? you.It is not very big when you ???coompare it with the ???2.floor.When you lok at the left side you will see an elegant,huge,old kitchen and in the kitchen there is a small,square hole from which you send the meals the other side.The other side is a room where you can eat ???tastaful meals.
The second flor is for sleeping and for guests.There are generally bedrooms in there.In each bedroom there is??? two beatiful,huge,old beds.They are generally made from wooden when you look ??? the rooms of house you will precisely hear voices sth like that (cracking sounds)"cıtırt cıtırt" because of the material of house.It is very interesting and (has)also stunning voice.
If you have a chance or if you pass (through)from Akşehir see this??? houses and after that you can go where you want to go ???
dear ferhat,
YanıtlaSilı like your essay it is really good except for some grammar and spelling mistakes.
The homes of Akşehir is also different.-the homes of Akşehir are..
in north-in the north part of city.
flor will met you-flour will meet you.
In each bedroom there is two beatiful,huge,old beds......there are.
this houses -these houses
after that you can go where you want to go-after that you can go wherever you want.thanks your writing it is almost perpect.